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I know what you did last winter

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It’s FF time again, yay! But I’m late as usual.Anyway without further ado, here’s my 12th time writing FF, a lovely weekly challenge run by our sweet hostess Rochelle 🙂

Thanks for the picture, Bjorn!

Copyright - Bjorn Brudberg

                                      Copyright – Björn Rudberg

Here are my 100 words:

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I KNOW WHAT YOU DID LAST WINTER

I watch the party from the shadows. Darkness is my only refuge.

Over the clink of champagne glasses, my ears catch the strumming of his guitar. There he is, my father. My brother, the perfect son, sits next to him, enjoying the festivities.

Why did you do it, Dad? Were you so ashamed of me? The tears fall fast on my scarred cheeks as I watch him  laugh.

The smell of gasoline and burning flesh are still fresh in my memory.

Last winter will repeat itself, but this time…. I’ll light the fire.

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Author: tinkerbelle96

Hi! I'm Sam, an 18 year old certified mad chick who likes to imagine that she can write. I live in India, a colourful, diverse country which is sadly getting polluted everyday by more and more violence....something no citizen can be proud of. I enjoy reading-basically horror, watching romcoms and horror flicks(yes, again horror, my favourite being Sinister- its psychotic just like me), eating( food, oh yes, I love foooooood), attending college, and most of all(oh, do stay and listen a while longer) I love animals. I have periodic urges to own and look random "pets". Currently I wish to own a baby elephant, which I will name Thama. I write to express what I feel, to keep that small creative bone alive in my body, and to make readers happy. I hope you like what I write!

15 thoughts on “I know what you did last winter

  1. Your story is so concise that it ultimately is more effective and tension-filled than if you wrote the story in its entirety. I like the way you ended it with the note of a looming act of vengeance. Cheers!

  2. Poor woman – looks like she’s going to get her revenge, though. Very dark (and not just the corner she’s forced to sit in)!

  3. a sad and horrifying (in more ways than one) story of vengeance.

  4. Dear Sam,

    You’ve packed a novel into a few lines. My guess is that the father has always looked as the daughter as sub-human. She must not have done his bidding or, worse, tried to educate herself. Of course this is pure conjecture on my part. A well written flash fiction on your part. I hope you’ve got that notebook started. 😉

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • Thank you so much for those lovely words Rochelle 🙂 And yes, that’s exactly what I wanted to portray- male chauvinism at its worst. That attitude is still sadly prevalent in many parts of the world, including my country, and it makes me very unhappy. I’m glad I managed to achieve my goal here 🙂

  5. Scarring by fire would be horrifying, living with it afterward even worse. Your few words told a sad tale!

  6. I agree that such behavior (that of the father) is far too common and so horrific. It’s difficult to even imagine how any parent can value a child so little that they would even consider attempting to destroy or harm that child. Well-written.

    janet

  7. Wow, that;s a lot for 100 words. This packs a powerful punch!

  8. Really Tinkerbelle – you are an awesome writer. Well, the father evidently brought this hatred and coming revenge on himself. I wonder why he did such an awful thing to his own son! I hope he doesn’t take out the revenge on his brother too. Very, very well written! Thanks Tink! Nan 🙂

  9. Tinkerbelle, This was a very well-written, and unfortunately realistic, story. It’s horrible that when a child comes into the world beautiful, some spiteful, twisted parent or other person has to cause damage. Good story.

    Susan

  10. I know this is old but I realized I haven’t really been keeping up with the blogs I’ve been following lately. So I’m making the rounds. I think this is one of your best flash fictions of all the ones I’ve read! Concise and strong as hell, especially how you ended it, and how you described the protagonist just by showing us what she’s seeing. Lovely!

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