Hi! Here’s my sixth attempt at writing a 100 word flash fiction for FF, in response to the photo prompt chosen by our lovely and talented hostess Rochelle ๐ For anyone who wants to join in, FF is a fun challenge and the community is very encouraging, so feel free to participate!ย
Thank you, Sandra, for this really interesting photo loved writing on it! ๐
Here are my 95 words ๐
——————————————————————————————————————————————————————-
CRUSHED
โXavier, did you run the tractor today?โ
โAyuh, Ma, I did. Ainโt Pa gonna be pleased?โ
โDarn right he will be if youโs remembered to separate the heads beforehand. Your Pa, he hates it when the brains spill out and muck up the field.โ
โAyuh, I remembered, donโ worry. I even removed the intestines.โ
โYour Pa will be proud, Xavier!โ
โAinโt that Bessie, Ma? Looks like Paโs back, with them new prospectors. I wonder what theyโll do when they realize we conned them!โ
โOh theyโll be crushed, son!โ
Xavier and his mother laughed together.
February 28, 2014 at 4:31 pm
By god! I swear
You are amazing! ๐
February 28, 2014 at 4:33 pm
Thank you smudged ๐
February 28, 2014 at 4:40 pm
Gruesomely good!
February 28, 2014 at 5:19 pm
Thank you!
February 28, 2014 at 6:59 pm
Oh my…lol
February 28, 2014 at 7:01 pm
๐ Thank you!
February 28, 2014 at 7:34 pm
Absolutely fantastic-love this wickedly evil tale-what a family! ๐
March 3, 2014 at 4:33 pm
Thanks ๐
March 5, 2014 at 5:58 pm
๐
February 28, 2014 at 10:52 pm
See? Dark and funny! Yes you are, Sam! ๐
Virtuals hugs ( I still need them arms ) Tay.
March 1, 2014 at 9:53 am
Thank you!! You’re such a sweetheart Tay ๐
March 1, 2014 at 12:53 am
That’s one way to get cheap fertilizer–although I’m not sure the all that protein would be too good for the crops.
March 1, 2014 at 9:52 am
Haha true, must warn Xavier and his family about it ๐
March 1, 2014 at 1:40 am
dark humor at its best. loved the dialogue too ๐
March 1, 2014 at 9:52 am
Thank you! ๐
March 1, 2014 at 9:59 am
Oh my god! That was really well-written. I actually visualised the exchange in that country slang ๐
March 1, 2014 at 10:02 am
Thank you ๐
March 1, 2014 at 11:47 am
Gruesome and amazing! I really enjoyed this ๐
March 1, 2014 at 11:51 am
Thank you! ๐
March 1, 2014 at 4:57 pm
It’s sinister, evil and the nonchalance involved in the process is tangible. It really tickles my love of the macabre. Great work!!
March 1, 2014 at 5:08 pm
Thank you!
March 1, 2014 at 5:15 pm
Brilliant! Sinister, chilling, and I loved it ๐
March 1, 2014 at 5:17 pm
Thank you ๐
March 1, 2014 at 5:51 pm
KZ’s comment said it all! I kind of hope the prospectors have a surprise of their own for the evil clan ๐
March 2, 2014 at 6:58 am
Haha! That would be super amazing! Wicked clan against wicked would-be victims! Thanks for stopping by ๐
March 1, 2014 at 7:50 pm
Whoa, this is dark and dicey. I come away with this thinking of crushed heads. Oh my!
March 2, 2014 at 6:56 am
Thanks, glad you enjoyed ๐
March 1, 2014 at 8:51 pm
Just another day in the life of…a wickedly, innovative family. Love it…even though I wouldn’t want to do business with your characters.
March 2, 2014 at 6:55 am
Haha, yes this is one creepy family! Thanks for stopping by ๐
March 1, 2014 at 9:21 pm
Well, that’s pleasant! And I thought my story was gross! Nicely scarey and nicely done!
March 2, 2014 at 6:55 am
Thanks a lot! ๐
March 2, 2014 at 9:56 pm
I’m glad I didn’t read this while eating.. great and gruesome
March 3, 2014 at 4:21 pm
Thanks so much Bjorn ๐
March 2, 2014 at 10:51 pm
I’m so glad he remembered to separate. Otherwise it would have been really gross. ๐
janet
March 3, 2014 at 4:21 pm
Yes, it would have! And then it might have really annoyed his Pa, and Pa would have crushed him as well perhaps ๐ Thanks for stopping by, Janet!
March 3, 2014 at 1:57 am
it’s always best when you keep the dirty deeds within the family structure. wah-ha-ha!! well done, Sam.
March 3, 2014 at 4:19 pm
Thanks Sun ๐
March 3, 2014 at 11:09 am
That shared laughter at the end sounds almost like a cackle. Lovely and gruesome.
March 3, 2014 at 4:17 pm
Thank you Sarah ๐
March 3, 2014 at 10:00 pm
I just hate it when brains get stuck to your boot. Smashingly good story, Tinkerbelle
March 5, 2014 at 2:58 pm
Thank you! ๐
March 4, 2014 at 4:45 am
What a family! You look so sweet never thought you would write like this.
March 5, 2014 at 2:58 pm
Thank you Indira!Yes, appearances are often deceptive ๐
March 6, 2014 at 4:17 am
So true. :-0
March 4, 2014 at 1:31 pm
Well-written story. I’m wondering what kinds of bodies are out in that field, human or otherwise. I’m half afraid to ask Seems like a family to stay away from.
March 5, 2014 at 2:57 pm
Ah yes, wisest not to ask. Who knows whom they might target next! Thank you for commenting ๐
March 4, 2014 at 8:15 pm
Very well written – I liked this family more than I should have given their gruesome nature
March 5, 2014 at 2:56 pm
Thanks for stopping by1 ๐